When I was young , I always heared about “I am doing this for YOU!” after my parents punished me. Take one thing for example,one day,I hang out with my friends and I was too excited at the time to go home late.Then,they,my parent, got very angrily to blame and even more punished me. I was so angry at that time, I completely can't understand the reason why they said that. Ignorant and childish as I was , I always fought against what they said and rebeled in the period.
When the time passed, I grow up more maturer and know many things of right and wrong. I also recollected the hard time when I rebeled. More maturer I am, more things Ican understand. Now I totally understand the reason why my parents laid so strict on my behavior and talk. I was regrate to the mischievious daughter I had to be. Maybe everyone would say it another time, but I will not do what I have done in my childhood, instead, I will try to accept it and take it in consideration next time.
For the part of the writing technique, I think what lacks in your article most is that you did not point out clearly why you got to realize what your parents did to you and how you became mature. For instance, after describing the story about you and your parents in your childhood, you "jumped" to the sentences ,"More maturer I am, more things I can understand. Now I totally understand the reason why my parents laid so strict on my behavior and talk." If you can tell the readers how you had some changes in the feelings about your parents, it would make your article more attractive. Otherwise, the readers will get nothing special from your story, right.
回覆刪除With regard to some specific grammatical mistakes, remember, you are telling a story in the past, so use the tone of the past tense.(Some of the verb forms are not correct.)
I think in our life, most of us would experience the time when we just wanted to do something against our parents' or teacher's expectation. I did so when I was in junior high school. At that time I hated everything my parents and teachers wanted my to do. So I often had arguments with them. But to my surprise, when I graduated from junior high school,I knew how to put myself in others' shoes. Then I suddently found that everything my parents did was good for me. From then on, I seldom had quarrells with them.
回覆刪除Now I am a mother of two babies. I do not know when they will experience their 'rebellion pariod" but I do hope they will get through it by themselves and learn something from it.
When I was young, I always heard about “I am doing this for you!” after my parents punished me. I thought most of us must go through such experience before. Take one event which happened to me for example: one day, I hang out with my friends, and I was too excited at that time to remember to go home. Then, my parents, got very angrily to blame and even more punished me. I was so angry at that time; I completely can't understand the reason why they said that. Everything I wanted to do at that time just argued with them to show my angry. Ignorant and childish as I was, I always fought against what they said and rebelled in the period. However, when the time passed, I grew up more mature and knew many things of right and wrong. I stopped arguing with them and started to put myself in their shoes.Gradually, I found that they really did good for me by saying that kind of remarks. And more mature I am more things I can understand. Now I totally understand the reason why my parents laid so strict on my behavior and talk. I was so regret as the mischievous daughter I had to be. But I will not do it again what I had done in my childhood, instead, I will try to take things as same as my parents, think the way they think, and feel the way they feel. Now, there doesn't exist any voice of arguement in my family.
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I know the important of coherence now. Thanks for your advice.